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Rahmailis (18259)                                                            
NK-2 / 2010    

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Delicious fried noodles



A lot of people like eating noodles if they are busy and do not have much time to make another food. I have a story about how to make fried noodle, when I was in junior high school, my friend teach me how to made a fried noodle with the sort time and easy process also it is delicious. Now I will share my knowledge about it to you. 

Before make it, we need the ingredients. We need one noodle and one egg, mashed chili, celery, 2/3 liter water and flavor. We can get all in the market because we could choose where the good qualities are. After all of the ingredient gathered, we can begin to make delicious fried noodles.

It is easy to make Fried noodles. First make sure the stove has been turn, prepare a pot and add the vegetable oil in the skillet. When oil became hot put chili finely and fried noodles flavor from the package. Then add celery that had in the washed, wait a few minute and add sufficient water. After the water boiling add fried noodles into the water that has mixed with spices. Wait until the dish brown and mix the egg and then put into the noodle. Stir it until done and smell well. Finally add a sprinkle a little decoration such as tomatoes in slices at the edge of the plate and sprinkling crackers.

Actually to make a delicious fried noodle is simple and easy. We do not spend much time and the ingredient easy to find, also we can make it every time but I suggest you to do not often eat noodle because it is not good to your health.

15 komentar:

Giiya Erinaa mengatakan...

Hi Ami,..

Your essay is good enough.
I am interested about it. :)

Look at paragraph 1, line 4.
"my friend teach me how to made a fried noodle with the sort time and easy process also it is delicious"

I think it's good to you to changes it with :
"my friend taught me how to make a fried noodle with the sort time and easy process also it is delicious."

Look at the last paragraph, line 2.
I think the ingredient more than one. So, you need to add "s".
Then, you have to add verb be "are" after ingredients because easy is a adj.

I think that's all,..
:)

NB: please give your comments on my blog,.
Thanks,..

Yuni Arnida mengatakan...

dear Ami....

I just want to give you an advice,
in paragraph two
"Before make it, we need the ingredients. We need one noodle and one egg....."

according to me, it is better to you if you changes it to be :
"Before we make it, we need some ingredients. The ingredients are a pack of noodle, an egg and......"

hehehe...
that is all to me...
thank you ami....

Rahmailis mengatakan...
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Anonim mengatakan...

amy,

I think you must pay attention with your grammar and punctuation.
maybe with your contraction too :)

I think your essay is very interesting, you can tell how the ways to make a delicious fried rice.
and this makes me want to try it at home.

keep writng .

please give your comments on my blog too :)

MiLLa MuLtin mengatakan...

amie ilis.....

so far your essay is good enough,,

but, i have found a little mistake,,
my friend "teach" change by V2,,
then "made" change by V1,,
because in 1 sentence just may 1 word in past,,

pay attention about grammar and do not use Indonesian style,,
OK,,

let's improve it!!!
:)

muhamad sabil mengatakan...

Amy this is my comment:
in paragraph 1, I think it's like tell about your story, actually it's not like procedure text..

and I think you can separate the steps into some paragraph to make it clear..

that's all from me..
so far so good..

Aulia Fitri mengatakan...

assalamu'alaikum...

your essay is interesting me and i like your essay but i've some comments for your essay.

firstly, in the last paragraph line 2 (We do not spend much time and the ingredient easy to find ...)
i think you must out "s" after "ingredient".

second, in paragraph 4 line 4 (Then add celery that had in the washed, wait a few minute and add sufficient water)
i think you'd better to give comma after "then"

Ok. i think thats all..
may these good comments for you.. :)

Siska Febrina­ ­ mengatakan...

your essay is good enough.

but i think in paragraf 1
"A lot of people like eating noodles if they are busy and do not have much time to make another food"
i think it's better to change it with....a lot of people like eating noodles, according to me. i have.....

in last paragraf after find add (.)

Aulia Fitri mengatakan...

sorry Ami, I forgot one thing... as i know essay consist of 5 paragraph. So, you need add 1 more paragraph..

tenkiu.. :)

Anonim mengatakan...

hi mii,,,

you talk about fried noodle in ingredienst you didn't take a noodle.

so how do you make iot if you dont have a noodle!

hahahaha

Anonim mengatakan...

sorry mii,,,

you was make it and i want pick my argument out.

hehehehe
im sorry

Adnan Chucklaz mengatakan...

it is good...

be careful of your grammar like "my friend teach...." (my friend taught....)
"we could choose..." (we can choose...)

thanks for giving comment in my blog...
:)
hhahaha

Wira the Kanadian mengatakan...

Hi,Ami...
You are the first commentator in my blog for this essay.Thank you for your suggestion.

This is interesting recipe. Maybe I should practice it sometimes.

>>>You should aware for using capital letters because capital letters including to writing rules and you must obey it.

Like when you write the title,it should wrote by capital letters.

Also,in paragraph 3 line 1,you write,"Fried noodle" in the middle of sentence which should not be capital letters there.

Helza_Hardyanti mengatakan...

i think you have a good essay..

my suggest is make your title be interesting.
keep your writing ^^

Rahmailis mengatakan...

all of my friend..
thanks for your comment..
in the next writing i will change all of my mistake, and i write a good essay more than now..
and always keep spirit..
:)

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